Today I was in the mood for an inspiring challenge that was also fun.
And it arrived. Click here if you want to find out more about Friday Fictioneers and read all the other entries here. Briefly the challenge is to write a 100-word story inspired by a picture prompt. Here’s this Friday’s prompt and my story below:
Copyright: Sean Fallon http://theequiaticbind.com/
“Jesus Miles!” his wife laughed. “You run just like a girl!” She and Sally exchanged amused glances. Bruce grinned.
“Well done, old boy!”
Miles, breathless and puffing, felt himself go red.
Wordlessly, he handed his wife the soft pink scarf the wind had snatched from her neck. Philippa had shrieked and Miles had immediately raced after it – rescuing it from the wind’s grasp, bringing it back to her like a prize.
She accepted it graciously. “Thank you my precious sweet! ” she said solemnly and patted him, smiling at Bruce.
Everyone liked Philippa. You couldn’t fault her. She was so disarming.
nina nakamura 
AnElephant loves the subtlety of the undertones here.
Potentially a lot more happening.
Very well written.
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Nina thanks AnElephant for his kind observations.
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love it!
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Thank you Mrs Carmichael – but do check out the other stories too – there are some marvelous contributions! http://new.inlinkz.com/luwpview.php?id=338383
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Dear Nina,
Welcome to Friday Fictioneers. You may find yourself back here every week as it’s highly addicting. I started as a participant a year ago April and you see where it’s gotten me. 😉
I like your use of the prompt. Poor Miles has certainly been taken apart. Perhaps he should find some real friends. Nice one.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks for the warm welcome Rochelle! I am already worried about being addicted! 🙂
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“You run like a girl” How wounding is that? A terrific story that says such a lot whilst not really saying it at all. Well done!
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Thank you so much Sandra!
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Aaahhh the games people play.
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Quite the pair you’ve created. I confess I kind of want to disarm Phillipa.
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🙂 You have my permission…
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Disarming. Well done.
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So good when someone sees 🙂
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It’s a dog’s life for Miles. Fetch, boy. Nicely written piece of disturbia.
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Thanks Mike! First time I’ve participated and have really enjoyed the experience – getting feedback but especially reading what others have made of it.
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The meaning takes awhile to sink in – I had to read it twice to get it. Then it came to me: this is the most fearsome and lethal of female dominance ball hacking put downs that men fear and strive to arm themselves to meet, so as to win the prize
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Yes! That comment “you run like a girl!” was something I heard a woman say to her husband and I was stunned at how she was able to come off as amusing and nice while her husband privately struggled to retrieve himself wondering why he felt so humiliated…
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Poor Miles!
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Indeed!
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Disarming? 🙂 I think she sounds catty, but…
janet
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I’ve witnessed women who can publicly take a man apart and at the same time manage to come off well to others… thanks for your comment Janet! 🙂 It’s getting those 100 words to say a whole lot more than just 100 words… 🙂
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I understood that the people in your story felt that way, but I didn’t think so. 🙂
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Ah right! Got it! 🙂
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